Jon Singer ([info]jonsinger) wrote,
@ 2005-05-07 23:49:00
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It being 5-7-5, as my friend Josh reminded me earlier...
...I thought I should do something appropriate before the end of the day.

Cherry blossoms long
gone, I now watch the inchworms
eating all the leaves.

There may be a moon
out tonight, but I can't see
it through the rainclouds.

Spring cleaning -- my lab
has a new shelf set tonight;
my shoulder, a bruise.

Pumpkin, tomato,
melon, cucumber, carrot:
happy little sprouts.

We'll soon have roses,
and I must plant out the two
new tea bushes.

Wishing all of you
the joys of May: bright greens and
delicate sprinklings.

(Those aren't quite true to the classic form, but I guess they'll do.)

— jon

[Added in proof at a later date:

Hami-gua, why don't
you sprout? Are you old and tired,
or just obstinate?]


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[info]ceramufary
2005-05-08 06:31 am UTC (link)
Those were pretty nice. Even if not true to classical form -- I've always liked that a haiku could pack such a heavy punch in such a tiny package. The one you just wrote about Spring Cleaning invokes a whole series of scenes in the reader's mind -- probably not accurate, but far more than just the three lines you wrote.

Hi again, by the way. Nice to see you posting here more.

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[info]jonsinger
2005-05-09 04:24 am UTC (link)
Hi! Glad you liked them. Happy to be able to post more. Sometimes I don't have time, and in general I try to keep the quotidian natter down to a dull roar. I don't always succeed, but hey.

My shoulder is okay now. (I'd provide more detail, but it risks destroying the sense that the little poem provides...)

Cheers —
jon

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[info]crazysoph
2005-05-08 07:06 am UTC (link)
Those aren't quite true to the classic form, but I guess they'll do.

Who cares? I'm smiling, they're evocative and that's the best thing about haiku.

Crazy(should discipline herself to this form again, soon)Soph

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[info]jonsinger
2005-05-09 04:25 am UTC (link)
Glad you like them. It's a wonderful form, even when it's slightly debased.

Best —
jon

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[info]jbru
2005-05-08 09:39 am UTC (link)
It is too late now,
technically, to comment
with such grace. How sad.

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[info]jonsinger
2005-05-09 04:25 am UTC (link)
Teehee. Nicely done.

Cheers —
jon

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[info]redbird
2005-05-08 01:53 pm UTC (link)
Excellent.

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[info]jonsinger
2005-05-09 04:27 am UTC (link)
Ahhh. Glad you like them. I have no idea why they come to me so smoothly, but for some reason they do.

Hope all's well with you.

Hugs —
jon

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[info]skylarker
2005-05-08 03:35 pm UTC (link)
On May Day it snowed:
the parade was undaunted;
Lilacs are budding.

Green life springing up:
From dirt, from death and decay,
Shows poets the way.

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[info]jonsinger
2005-05-09 04:37 am UTC (link)
The lilacs are passing
already, down here in the
South. What a strange place.

(Green with envy for
greener grass across the fence?
It's no better here.)

Poets and mushrooms
and corn and peas... we all like
a nice bath in shit.

(Uhhh, I meant "a nice rich compost."   ;o)

Little seedling, what
will you be when you grow up --
Cardoon or crabgrass?

(Someone gave me a baby cardoon today. At least, that's what it's sposeta be. Looks more like costmary right now, but it doesn't smell, so who knows?)

Cheers —
jon

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[info]alicebentley
2005-05-08 04:05 pm UTC (link)
Rain clouds, so welcome
it is my first time to see
a rhododendron

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Rhodos --
[info]jonsinger
2005-05-09 04:41 am UTC (link)
Nice.

I like rhodos. Many of them are fragrant, btw, and a few are truly stellar.

Presume you've seen several by now. D'you like them?

Cheers —
jon

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[info]fara_shimbo
2005-05-08 05:27 pm UTC (link)
Roses! My gallica is blooming, my Veilchenblau may be blooming by the end of the day.

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[info]jonsinger
2005-05-09 04:42 am UTC (link)
Woot! I have things with buds on them, but nothing really open yet. I've also lost a few, unfortunately. (Have you ever smelled 'Morden Sunrise'?)

Happy sniffing!
j

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[info]fara_shimbo
2005-05-09 12:38 pm UTC (link)
No, I haven't. The only Morden I know is from Babylon 5.

Was it the gallica you said you couldn't smell? I can smell this one but my friend Patti can't.

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[info]jonsinger
2005-05-09 09:22 pm UTC (link)
I'm good with Gallicas; it's the Albas that I'm partly nose-blind to. (I can smell 'Félicité Parmentier' just fine, though. Terrific rose.)

Cheers —
jon

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[info]flit
2005-05-08 07:34 pm UTC (link)
Hmm, the sprout one may be pretty classic? It has a caesura and sprouts implicitly refer to season.

They all made me smile. :)

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[info]jonsinger
2005-05-09 04:45 am UTC (link)
You're probably right. I'm a bit loose on the formal side of it, and I only vaguely recall that they are supposed to have emotional revelation (at least implicit) and seasonal content (likewise).

Glad you liked them.

Cheers —
jon

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[info]rackletang
2005-05-09 04:09 am UTC (link)
Ah, you've reminded me! My sister is trying to get rid of a kiln that lives in her garage (in Herndon, VA). I didn't know whether you or someone you know might be interested. I can be reached at rachelpea at yahoo dot com.

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Kiln in Herndon --
[info]jonsinger
2005-05-09 04:46 am UTC (link)
Have sent email about this. Definitely curious about it — thanks for the heads-up!

jon

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