Jon Singer ([info]jonsinger) wrote,
2005-05-07 23:49:00
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It being 5-7-5, as my friend Josh reminded me earlier...

...I thought I should do something appropriate before the end of the day.

Cherry blossoms long
gone, I now watch the inchworms
eating all the leaves.

There may be a moon
out tonight, but I can't see
it through the rainclouds.

Spring cleaning -- my lab
has a new shelf set tonight;
my shoulder, a bruise.

Pumpkin, tomato,
melon, cucumber, carrot:
happy little sprouts.

We'll soon have roses,
and I must plant out the two
new tea bushes.

Wishing all of you
the joys of May: bright greens and
delicate sprinklings.

(Those aren't quite true to the classic form, but I guess they'll do.)

— jon

[Added in proof at a later date:

Hami-gua, why don't
you sprout? Are you old and tired,
or just obstinate?]

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[info]ceramufary

May 8 2005, 06:31:32 UTC 7 years ago

Those were pretty nice. Even if not true to classical form -- I've always liked that a haiku could pack such a heavy punch in such a tiny package. The one you just wrote about Spring Cleaning invokes a whole series of scenes in the reader's mind -- probably not accurate, but far more than just the three lines you wrote.

Hi again, by the way. Nice to see you posting here more.

[info]jonsinger

May 9 2005, 04:24:16 UTC 7 years ago

Hi! Glad you liked them. Happy to be able to post more. Sometimes I don't have time, and in general I try to keep the quotidian natter down to a dull roar. I don't always succeed, but hey.

My shoulder is okay now. (I'd provide more detail, but it risks destroying the sense that the little poem provides...)

Cheers —
jon

[info]crazysoph

May 8 2005, 07:06:53 UTC 7 years ago

Those aren't quite true to the classic form, but I guess they'll do.

Who cares? I'm smiling, they're evocative and that's the best thing about haiku.

Crazy(should discipline herself to this form again, soon)Soph

[info]jonsinger

May 9 2005, 04:25:04 UTC 7 years ago

Glad you like them. It's a wonderful form, even when it's slightly debased.

Best —
jon

[info]jbru

May 8 2005, 09:39:40 UTC 7 years ago

It is too late now,
technically, to comment
with such grace. How sad.

[info]jonsinger

May 9 2005, 04:25:32 UTC 7 years ago

Teehee. Nicely done.

Cheers —
jon

[info]redbird

May 8 2005, 13:53:24 UTC 7 years ago

Excellent.

[info]jonsinger

May 9 2005, 04:27:23 UTC 7 years ago

Ahhh. Glad you like them. I have no idea why they come to me so smoothly, but for some reason they do.

Hope all's well with you.

Hugs —
jon

[info]skylarker

May 8 2005, 15:35:42 UTC 7 years ago

On May Day it snowed:
the parade was undaunted;
Lilacs are budding.

Green life springing up:
From dirt, from death and decay,
Shows poets the way.

[info]jonsinger

May 9 2005, 04:37:36 UTC 7 years ago

The lilacs are passing
already, down here in the
South. What a strange place.

(Green with envy for
greener grass across the fence?
It's no better here.)

Poets and mushrooms
and corn and peas... we all like
a nice bath in shit.

(Uhhh, I meant "a nice rich compost."   ;o)

Little seedling, what
will you be when you grow up --
Cardoon or crabgrass?

(Someone gave me a baby cardoon today. At least, that's what it's sposeta be. Looks more like costmary right now, but it doesn't smell, so who knows?)

Cheers —
jon

[info]alicebentley

May 8 2005, 16:05:42 UTC 7 years ago

Rain clouds, so welcome
it is my first time to see
a rhododendron

[info]jonsinger

May 9 2005, 04:41:06 UTC 7 years ago

Rhodos --

Nice.

I like rhodos. Many of them are fragrant, btw, and a few are truly stellar.

Presume you've seen several by now. D'you like them?

Cheers —
jon

[info]fara_shimbo

May 8 2005, 17:27:16 UTC 7 years ago

Roses! My gallica is blooming, my Veilchenblau may be blooming by the end of the day.

[info]jonsinger

May 9 2005, 04:42:07 UTC 7 years ago

Woot! I have things with buds on them, but nothing really open yet. I've also lost a few, unfortunately. (Have you ever smelled 'Morden Sunrise'?)

Happy sniffing!
j

[info]fara_shimbo

May 9 2005, 12:38:43 UTC 7 years ago

No, I haven't. The only Morden I know is from Babylon 5.

Was it the gallica you said you couldn't smell? I can smell this one but my friend Patti can't.

[info]jonsinger

May 9 2005, 21:22:28 UTC 7 years ago

I'm good with Gallicas; it's the Albas that I'm partly nose-blind to. (I can smell 'Félicité Parmentier' just fine, though. Terrific rose.)

Cheers —
jon

[info]flit

May 8 2005, 19:34:28 UTC 7 years ago

Hmm, the sprout one may be pretty classic? It has a caesura and sprouts implicitly refer to season.

They all made me smile. :)

[info]jonsinger

May 9 2005, 04:45:16 UTC 7 years ago

You're probably right. I'm a bit loose on the formal side of it, and I only vaguely recall that they are supposed to have emotional revelation (at least implicit) and seasonal content (likewise).

Glad you liked them.

Cheers —
jon

[info]rackletang

May 9 2005, 04:09:46 UTC 7 years ago

Ah, you've reminded me! My sister is trying to get rid of a kiln that lives in her garage (in Herndon, VA). I didn't know whether you or someone you know might be interested. I can be reached at rachelpea at yahoo dot com.

[info]jonsinger

May 9 2005, 04:46:10 UTC 7 years ago

Kiln in Herndon --

Have sent email about this. Definitely curious about it — thanks for the heads-up!

jon
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